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Wednesday, 31 July 2013


Mystery
He blinked his eyes so as to stop tears from flowing.
‘Do it’, she ordered.
Nervy, he pushed the plunger into the deltoid muscle, thrusting the medicine into the system.
‘What are you doing’? She screamed. 
Upon her screaming, he opened his eyes to find the needle injected into the cotton sheets and he shuddered.

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Love

‘Do it,’ will you? She ordered. 
I rose from my deck chair to look directly into her eyes.
Cool breeze played with her tresses as I tugged the flying strands behind her ear.
Pulling her close, I tilted her face upwards to match my height.
I blew.
She relaxed.
Foreign particle had left her eye.



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  1. Both the stories are very nicely done :)

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  2. The first one was so hilarious . the second one is so tender and I expected something else. But it was only a foreign particle.

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    1. Sorry for the late reply... The comment was in the spam folder..hence...

      Glad that you loved both :)

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  3. Both stories with surprise endings. Well done! :-D

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    1. Thanks Debbie! Yes a slight twist in the end makes a good read! :D

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  4. Bossy lady, ain't she? ;)
    I like how you used the words 'do it' in both your 55ers, Rohan! Clever!

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    1. LOL! Inspired from someone very close :P
      Thanks Corinne! A word from you made my day!!! :)

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  5. Ohhhhohoohhhhh!! and Awwww!!

    I loved both the pieces...now I need to get mine on order :)

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    1. Haha.... cannot get a better reaction than this!! :)
      Looking forward to read your entry, Kajal. :)

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  6. I loved the love story what an end

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  7. What a cute end to the love story - made me chuckle. Very nice.
    Dropping by from the 55Fiction linkup.

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    1. Thanks Suzy! Glad that brought a smile on your face :)

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  8. Mr Rohan ...I read this story at two different times and I laughed the second time, it interpreted differently today :P
    Waise, are U scared of needles too?

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    1. Oh wow! You read it two times!! *Yayy*
      But what made you laugh the second time and not the first time? Yes and no, sometimes scared :P

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  9. She seems to be one bossy lady. Nicely done! :)
    What a night!
    Ishithaa

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  10. The combination looked like speaking of the same couple. This one is rohan and hetal? Is it :D :D

    Richa

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    1. Haha Richa.... Nope this isn't me and Hetal :)

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  11. Lol at the second story...I wasn't expecting that..you got me there.

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  12. Hey, it's such a lovely 55 words challenge:)

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